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Well, it took me over two months, FAR longer than what I would have liked, but as of two days ago...I finally did it.

I finally finished Chapter 4 of Melissa's story, "Growing Up!".

This chapter gave me some SERIOUS hell to write. I had this chapter mostly complete over a month ago...and had troubles finishing it since I couldn't think of how to properly end it. To make matters worse...I had been writing that chapter while in a real funk, and what I had finished of the chapter looked like...Well, like crap to me. It definitely wasn't up to standard; overall the chapter just looked clunky, dull, and rather uninspired. For a brief while I contemplated putting this story on hiatus (like Fly By Night currently is) and working on some one-offs...but ultimately I decided to re-write the whole chapter from scratch and see if it turned out better, something I have NEVER done with one of my previous chapters for any of my stories. And, at long last, I FINALLY finished it. It's not a GREAT chapter, I don't think (I've written plenty better), but at least I think everything came together well enough in the chapter and it certainly looks a HELL of a lot better than my ugly first draft. Once I get it back from proofreading, I'll post it up here...for the few people who actually care about my stories (as I've said, I've become pretty aware that most of the "fandom" on here isn't interested in my stories-either they're too intimidated by the length of my chapters (in which case, sorry...I can't really do anything about that) or they don't like the darker tones of my stories and would prefer that I write more lighthearted stuff (in which case, again, sorry-they're MY stories and I CAN write them however I want to)).

When I first started writing Melissa's story, I thought it would be a fairly simple story to write since it's supposed to be "Story of Ralph"'s companion piece; how was I to know this story was going to give me such fits? :D Ah well, at least it's on the move again! Feels good to not have this story be practically dead for two months! I won't let you know when I'll write Chapter 5...I'm pretty much through announcing when I'll be writing chapters as I already know I can never meet any of my own deadlines. What's the point in announcing that I'm writing a chapter if it's not going to get done by the time I say it will? :XD: I will let you all know when I FINISH a chapter, though.
  • Mood: Joy
  • Listening to: Bloodrock-Fallin' Fallin' (1970)
  • Reading: The Internet
  • Watching: American Dad!
  • Playing: Pokemon Yellow (NES Pirate)
  • Eating: Flintstones Chewable Morphine (mmm!)
  • Drinking: Mmm...beer!

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~GoodCaptainClack
"While you're here, movie stars are stealing your women. Robert Redford is dating your lady. Tom Selleck is kissing your girlfriend. Bart Simpson is sleeping with your wife."-Iraqi propaganda from the Gulf war intended to psyche out American troops
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A few little random factoids about me:
Birthday: April 1, 1992 (I really AM an April Fool's Day joke!)
Birthplace: Oakland Naval Hospital, Oakland, CA (I just looked it up and it no longer exists. Huh.)
Hometown: Visalia, CA
Current residence: Somewhereland, SC (will not reveal real town name)
Where would I ideally like to live: Somewhere in Virginia (I've been through there before. Some really beautiful country there! What can I say, I'm a fool for the country (sorry Foghat))

I am a mysterious enigma of the Internet...

I am a strange human being indeed. My three main interests are cartoons, classic rock, and motorsports. I told you I was weird.

I'm a semi-accomplished writer. Still trying to work on getting better...

Just one note: Although I appreciate positive feedback on my stories, please, do not request me to write anything for you. Due to my past experience with requests, I do NOT accept them under any circumstances. I MAY take ideas and suggestions to be used WITHIN stories, but if you request me to write a specific story for you, I will say no, no matter how nicely you ask me to do it for you. Really, I feel more comfortable writing what I want to write over what other people might want me to write. I am also willing to accept constructive criticism of my stories, but any and all flames of my stories will be removed. I really do not wish to read those.

Also I'm named after...Bryan Adams. I feel ashamed...
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:icondavid31:
Thank you....for helping to expose that perv again. :hug:.
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:icondavid31:
Beware he is now using an account called :iconcoonfag:.
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:icongoodcaptainclack:
~GoodCaptainClack Jun 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Sadly I'm convinced this guy is NEVER going to go away. I have a feeling he'll always keep coming back under a new account and a new identity, trying to con people into thinking he is a brand new member. I don't think he'll EVER go away for good...The only Raccoons fan worse than him that I'm across is that creep who wants Ralph to dump Melissa so he can screw him...Heaven help us all if THAT freak makes his way to this site...
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:icondavid31:
I wasn't having a serious dig at America, in my own way I was just saying how amazed I was at how Americans can live in such risky conditions, again I did not mention that anyone in America should immigrate to another nation. You can re-post that journal if you wish, but I won't respond to it this time.
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~GoodCaptainClack May 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I have had a week to collect my thoughts on this issue, and here are my final thoughts on this issue. So get ready for something rather wordy and lenghty...

If I must be honest, you came off as rather condescending and somewhat snobbish with that comment, no offense. It (and some of your other comments) reminded me of annoying Youtube commenters...Too often I see British people commenting on American issues on Youtube or on other places with REALLY snarky and snobbish comments, about how Britain is OBVIOUSLY a superior nation to America, how idiotic each and every American is compared to the great people of the UK, and so on and so forth. I know not all British people are like that, but damn, it seems like every significant major snob I come across on the Internet is British. If I didn't know better, from some of the snobby comments by British people I've seen out there, I'd probably think the average Brit wants their country to fight America or would like to see America wiped off the world map...

I do still consider a friend, but honestly, I really do not like those comments which can come off as looking down on America. I know America's not a perfect nation by any means. Neither is the UK. I mean, Christ, look at what happened in just the past week with the Muslim extremists hacking up a soldier and then making a video saying how they will never give up fighting the UK until they win and drive the British out of their homelands. There is NO perfect nation on the planet. If you had a truly perfect nation, everything would be so drab and dull...America isn't superior to the UK, and the UK isn't superior to America. And I REALLY hate it when people from one country try to make their country out to be a superior one to the other country. I know it wasn't your intent to come off that way...But the point is that comment did end up coming out that way from my point of view, and I really wasn't fond of it at all. I would appreciate it if in the future you thought a little more before making a comment like that.

Anyways, I'm over and through with that journal anyways. I'm not mad at you anymore, and I hope you understand my point of view. There are times when I feel I REALLY need to speak my mind...this was one of them.
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:icondavid31:
Well I would like to say that I am sorry about the comment I made, I wasn't trying to sound snobbish at the slightest and I'm afraid I take great offense by what you said.

I noticed you also had to bring our current events into play as well, in regards to the soldier who got murdered by black British citizens who claim to be Muslims, I have my own thoughts on that, but I'll keep those to myself, as I don't think it has too much relevance here.

I did not say that either country was better then the other or anything of the sort, I should have said though that I'd wish America would give more of a warning or at least prepare for natural disasters as they happen on a semi-regular basis and it's always sad to see many people die where I felt the situation could have been improved and I'm sure fewer lives could have been lost. Since both countries promote freedom of speech, I'm sure you're wouldn't be mad at me to express what I just said. I strongly feel that improvements could be made to make the mid-western states a lot more stable places to live in, like trying to build homes which are more likely to stay put, following a natural disaster, if the Japanese can make buildings that are stable during earthquakes, I'm sure America could do something like that, but for tornedos and hurricanes. But if not, then they should tell people to evacuate beforehand and if people refuse, then I'm afraid the law will have to become involved. I'm sure it would be a major inconvenience to many, but that's what happens when you live in an unstable environment. But in no way at all, did I say that Americans should immigrate to somewhere else (as I told :iconkrdoz: and have since worked out our differences and I apologised to him too in fact) I was saddened at the situation and genuinely pondered how Americans could tolerate these disasters, but your nation is used to these disasters by now, but it doesn't aid the fact that the situation is still a sad one...emotionally. I was not trying to one-up America with the UK by any means, I'm fully aware that our country has it's problems, just so you know I've contemplated suicide because of her majesty's government!

But seeing as though I've come off as snobbish to you, perhaps we shouldn't speak to each other for a while. It would certainly put me at east a lot more in regards to previous discussions we had in the past about me feeling obligated to do a few things for you, especially since I've had a LOT to deal with over the past couple of months.

So I guess this will probably be one of my last replies to your messages for the time being.
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*Chopfe May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Sorry to share this with ya man, but you are a Simpsons fan after all...it's the Simpsons porno spoof from Argentina!

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~GoodCaptainClack May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
OH GOD. Really?! This atrocity is actually REAL?! Aw man, having one of these pieces of crap in the world is bad enough, but TWO? It must take a very special kind of person to find the idea of yellow people doing the nasty sexy...I am NOT that special kind of person. Incredibly cheap-looking and mind-warping...This and 2girls1cup BOTH are South American, I'm beginning to wonder if the people down there have some quite serious issues...

On a side note, I probably should watch more of the Cinema Snob. I always enjoy seeing bad or trashy movies getting taken apart in a sarcastic, snide way!
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*Chopfe May 12, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
LOL I dig the hell out of the Snob's reviews - one of my favorite internet reviewers. My fav reviews from him are the ones featuring cheap porno parodies of movies/cartoons, and "shot-on-video" horror flicks. It's hard to believe what kind of movies are out there!
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